~Goldenstar~
Mature Apprentice
I am Fire! I am Ice! Come near me if you dare.
Posts: 114
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Post by ~Goldenstar~ on Apr 30, 2009 17:04:33 GMT -5
Name: Darkkit Age: 4 moons Gender: She-cat Clan: FireClan Rank: Kit Eye Color: Gold Description: She is pitch black. She has one white spot on her tail. Her fur is long, but not to long. Her paws are small, and help her catch prey. She is a very small kitten. Her whiskers are really small because they got burnt in a fire, two day after she was born. Her back legs are very strong, so she can jump very high. Her front legs are strong, but not strong for her to climb trees with. Her claws help her hold prey firmly untill she kills it. Personality: She is nice to other cats. She loves her brother, and would never hurt him. She loves every cat in the clan. She helps with the apperntices, and elders. She is always looking for something to do, even if it gets her pelt dirty. History: Her mother and father died when she and Lightkit were born, (Dapplestripe and Tigerheart). Her and her brother have always been together no matter what. Some of the cats are always nice to her, she doesn't know why though. She is always thinking about her parents, and Lightkit, her brother, makes her think of her father more than her mother. Sometimes though, not all the time. RP Example:
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Post by εvanescent on Apr 30, 2009 18:47:13 GMT -5
sry, but ull need more than 1 line for her history. shes 4 moons old
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Post by Nighthunter on May 1, 2009 12:23:06 GMT -5
Sunstar you could include her parents,whether she has any siblings, her friends and /or enemies.You could metion if she wants kits in the future. ;D
Occ:I love the cat other wise.
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Post by chloe;; on May 9, 2009 8:28:41 GMT -5
Sorry Goldenstar for delaying this... Hm. Let's see... If you can please make her main details a bit longer, like 1 - 2 sentences, then I'll accept her. Make her have a few flaws; her personality sounds mary sue-ish. In description, make your sentences like this: Darkkit's long pelt is the color of a moonless night; pitch black. And you can describe her whiskers, paw pads, muzzle, to make your paragraph longer. ^^ Good job with the kitty, though. I like her, too. ^^
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Post by εvanescent on May 9, 2009 9:04:34 GMT -5
she doesnt have to if she doesnt want to....it just has to fit the criteria, which it already does. but the history could use a few more lines and the personality -is- kinda mary-sue...
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Post by Nighthunter on May 19, 2009 16:50:46 GMT -5
ok as long as you make her have a flaw of some kind later, otherwise this bio is now
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Post by F|u|z|z|e|h| on May 27, 2009 18:26:51 GMT -5
yeah... that does seem a little Mary Sue. Might I suggest visiting my shopette? xD
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